Alex's+Responses+(2)

Nature Walk By James Donovan: I really like the detail throughout the story. I am a fan of the ending, but wish thoughts sounds a little awkward. I guess there's a cool aspect to play with in the sense... were you two glad you took this outing? Was there something you wish you had done instead? Were you curious to look around the abandoned house? Just little things you can play up if you want instead of the kind of straight forward narrative. But good job.

How To Row by Erin Ferguson: Really nice Erin. I like how its not fully the kind of "here's how you row" paper and focuses a lot on more so how to gain that relationship to have success within your boat almost. I think that witht he crew terms there needs to be some kind of explanation to what they mean. Definitely interesting to get a feel for the authenticity, but as the audience, there's times when I don't fully understand. Good attention to detail though.

Machinima Films by Zach Morgan: I like how personal and unique this is to you. There's a lot of good personal aspects to the essay that shine through and you keep the focus. I think as the audience, I kind of what to know what Machinima film is to understand it more (but maybe I'm just weird and need a sort of concrete definition or visual aid). Maybe talk about films you have already made or what interests you about the machinima or what tit means. Great paper though.