Katherines+Responses+2

Erin-I really like the ending of your essay How to Row. The essay is a really good how to essay because it is very technical and detailed and the conclusion brings it all together when you talk about the trust and unity and how that benefits the whole boat.

Andrea- Your essay about the Special Olympics is really good, especially knowing you and how dedicated a soccer player you are, you could have written about soccer but the parallel you made to the athletes in the special olympics and learning from them is perfect. I also thought the specific example of the snowshoer really added to the essay.

Alex- Its hard to write a research paper on such an emotional topic, but you did a really good job of balancing the basic moral wrongs with hard evidence. The ending is also motivating, which is what this essay needs because the topic is so depressing